For this week we will be looking at the details associated with good narrative. Hopefully you will be able to upload a copy of your story by Friday to BoxNet. Please let me know if you run into trouble. Please post your comments for this week below....
In the piece “Once More to the Lake,” White describes a vacation that he used to take every year in August. He describes how he took his son there for the first time and returned for his first time in a long while. Throughout the writing there is so much in depth description. While describing everything in this piece, he has a way of either slowing down or speeding up a description. I found that when the reading seems to speed up, he uses a lot of commas and list like tools. For some reason when he does this, I find myself reading faster compared to when he uses full sentences. So when he is recalling many things, it seems more like a quick flashback. And when he’s remembering fewer things and using full sentences it seems more serene and slow.
ReplyDelete"Once More to the Lake" by E.B. White has a lot of detail within it. The points in which the reading seems to go faster is when he uses less commas and more flowing sentence structure. For instance when he uses the word "and" several times in one sentence instead of putting in a comma after each phrase the whole sentence tends to pick up the pace of the work. Also when he goes to his flashbacks the pace of the story changes to a much slower more laid back style of writing.
ReplyDeleteit was very descriptive, and really painted a picture in your mind. Over all it was an enjoyable read.
ReplyDelete" Once More to the Lake" by E.B. White is a narrative in which the father tries to find himself. He does this by looking back on his childhood;where he once visited this lake as a little boy. The writer speeds up and slows down this narrative by starting the story of when the guy was young. He then speeds up to the future in which the father is an adult with a son whom he takes to the same spot that he once visited as a child. But yet he finds himself reminiscing of his childhood and forgets at the moment that he's an adult in the present. By doing this type of narrative the author speeds up by telling the past, future and present life of the main character which is the father.
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ReplyDeleteIn "Once More to the Lake" by E.B. White, he uses a writing technique which changes the speed at which the reader reads the story. I found myself reading faster in sections of this piece that had longer, descriptive sentences with less commas and periods. An example of this is this sentence which he describes laying in bed at night feeling the dense heat, and the breeze through the screens, "We would be tired at night and lie down in the accumulated heat of the little bedrooms after a long hot day and the breeze would stir almost imperceptibly outside and the smell of the swamp drift in through the rusty screens." I found this piece to be very descriptive, and interesting how at most times the father couldn't tell who's shoes he was standing in, reminiscing about the past and living the present.
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